Tuesday, 14 December 2010

I would write you a love song moon... a poem by Claudia Schönfeld

I love to read poems - and love listening to someone reading poems to me even more. (I do this sometimes with my daughters) - but if the poet him(or her)self reads his/her poems to me it makes my day!

Think how fantastic it were if we had a recording of Goethe, reading his "Erlking." Wouldn't that be great?

To hear someone reading aloud his own work, pronouncing and accentuating it the way he or she had it in mind when writing it - hearing the poet's voice - I think this is just amazing, even if it may not be perfect.
I have just watched some funny poetry readings and videos on You Tube and some of them are really weird, but still - the personality shines through - and it adds to the joy.

Every once and a while someone commented on my blog with the desire to have one poem or another  read, and for a long time I didn't want to because of my German accent - but yep, thought I would give it a try and maybe encourage some of you to try it as well...

~ Claudia 





i would write you a love song moon...

if i didn’t know about your jagged bareness
i’d write you love song after love song and
love song after love song. but I know you're

not what the sun makes me think, hanging
like a dreamer in the sky, mesmerize my
highway morning with a soft-touch glow,

taking me ages from cold asphalt sheets
to warm, shimmering moon blankets. slim
golden figure, bowed slightly towards my still

bed-warm morning lips, enough to make me
wanna taste your smiling promises, forgetting
lightlessness and all that’s hidden deep beneath

sun’s warming and unveiling touch. darkness
throwing shades, hiding ice-cubed forts, clifted
frailty, muted soft-pale vessels, empty silence,

heavy burdens on bent shoulders. but all is seen
& felt is tender, splintered beauty, wooing gently
for my heart, stirring edgy tunes on husky lips &

if I didn’t know about your jagged bareness,
I’d write you love song after love song and
love song after love song, shouted madly

from the scaffolds of my hopes in every key,
I’m capable of playing


© Claudia Schönfeld

37 comments:

Neva Flores said...

Lovely Claudia!

M.L. Gallagher said...

Oh Claudia -- this is stunning and your accent makes it even more evocative.

I spent many years living in Germany -- your voice takes me back to wonderful memories and people I miss and times that held such joy for me.

thank you my friend. Absolutely stunning!

Boonie S said...

This is a lovely presentation. Your accent is an asset, not a hindrance.

Have a nice day, Boonie

Myrna R. said...

Aw, Claudia this is beautiful. Don't know what's wrong with my computer but videos and audios are not coming up. I'll get on a different computer to listen. I know I'll love your accent. (I lived in Germany for about 4 years.)

the walking man said...

That was a magnificent reading of a beautiful ode to the night light. You have added a piece of beauty to the world.

joanny said...

Claudia

your voice is soft and sensual adds a whole other deeper richer dimension to your already thought provoking and evocative poetry. This poem is another rich tapestry of the fabric of your soulful prose.

joanny

Brian Miller said...

hey claudia...will try again in a bit...the vid is not working, skipping etc...will try a reload because i would love to hear you read...

Cor said...

Claudia this was beautiful. I absolutely love your accent! Living in the states accents are the coolest thing to me. I loved your poem, it was so exquisite. I believe the reading enhanced it. That was the first time that I have ever heard a poem read out loud. I took four years of German in High School and loved it. Great contribution!

Dianne said...

Oh you make me cry, and the novelty of your images expressing the undeniable love we touch and carry inside

the jagged bareness

someday I hope someone writes a love song for me!
smiling and crying,
Di

Jerry said...

Fantastic. I love hearing people read their work as well...beautiful poem in a beautiful voice and accent.
Now it is time to integrate the sax into it...don't you think?

Liza said...

Claudia, this is INCREDIBLE!!!

Eric Alder said...

Don't fret about your German accent, Claudia... it's just how you talk, and I doubt anyone will fault you fir it. Nor should they, unless they speak flawless German AND English! (No, not even then!)

You might be interested in a Poetry Collection I picked up recently called "Poetry Speaks" (Expanded Edition) which comes with three CDs of the actual poets reading some of their poems.

(I'm pretty sure it's available on Amazon.com)

Maureen said...

Love it, Claudia. I hope you'll do more readings.

I urge you to offer your reading talent to Whale Sound.

Eva Gallant said...

That was absolutely beautiful. It makes me wish I could hear you read all of your poems!

hedgewitch said...

Normally I'm not a fan of spoken poetry,as people can get awfully carried away with themselves sometimes. But this was totally beautiful, you have a lovely voice for reading, and it was completely in tune with the soft wistful feeling of the poem. I enjoyed it very much.And your accent is very pleasant on the ear, adding a bit of personality and character to the piece. Thanks for the great start to my day.

dustus said...

Beautiful poem, Claudia. Loved hearing it!

budh.aaah said...

An ultimate love song to the moon

Dave Holloway said...

I'm not much into praise due to my own jaggedness but this one deserves lots. Beautifully written and read.
Thank you so much.

Claudia said...

wow - just back from work and was so curious if you would like my reading - and overwhelmed about your encouraging feedback...deeep breath...thank you so much! Looking forward to seeing you for One Shot in a bit..

moondustwriter said...

I happen to be quite partial to the moon :)
She inspires so much romance and yet she is a barren wasteland

Nicely done Claudia

Yola said...

Beuatiful!

girldaydreaming said...

dreamy... your gift of writing and beautiful voice lightens the load of a weary one... incredibly well done! brava!

Yola said...

Oops I meant Beautiful

See, I was so eager to comment, I didn't pay attention to what I wrote : )
I love your work

Mama Zen said...

Bravo! Bravo!

signed...bkm said...

Wonderful...love your beautiful words and your beautiful voice....so looking forward to hearing more....thank you...bkm

Gabriela Abalo said...

Beautiful!

Miranda said...

I haven't heard a poem read aloud in a while, thank you!
Your accent is amazing!
Miranda<3

G-Man said...

GERMAN?
Claudia's German?
"Ach Du Lieber"!!
She sounds like a very sexy Irish girl!
Wunderbar Fraulein....Danke.

RNSANE said...

How beautiful, especially to hear you read it. That makes it so much more special and personal.

kkrige said...

Oh My God that was AWESOME Claudia! Wow. I really really liked that. It had such a sensuous feel to it and hearing you read it made it so much better! Beautiful & I really mean that.

Alegria Imperial said...

Wow!!! Such poetry, Claudia! I'm afraid that if I say any word about it, I'd break the spell it has on me with your enchanting voice! Thank you. I'm still quite stunned...

Eric Alder said...

Claudia, my previous comment was written before hearing the audio.

Now that I've heard it, I feel I didn't state it strongly enough: Dieses ist wundervoll!

Melissa Campbell said...

This is beautiful Claudia! I read it first, then listened to you read, and I felt differently each time, both beautiful. I wish I could write like you. Blessings!

PattiKen said...

Claudia, this is wonderful. Your accent adds so much to the words. I'm so glad you recorded it.

More please?

Who Is Afraid of Alfred Hitchcock? said...

Hello! Claudia...
Claudia said,"To hear someone reading aloud his own work, pronouncing and accentuating it the way he or she had it in mind when writing it - hearing the poet's voice - I think this is just amazing, even if it may not be perfect."

I agree with you, and we (your readers,) were /are very fortunate to hear you read...
...your poem "I would write you a love song moon."

Which is very beautiful and your beautiful melodious tone just added to the poem.
Thank-you, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D

Shewriting said...

I absolutely loved it!

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