Poem & Photo by Adam Dustus
We shall see
Maybe one day
Melancholic shades of grey
Maybe one day
Melancholic shades of grey
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Swear off reflection
Verse not a weapon
No weeping leaves echo
Care for pretension
Verse not a weapon
No weeping leaves echo
Care for pretension
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Fall into winter
Whether it proves worse
Reflections froze dreary
Gloom bridging mirth
Gloom bridging mirth
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Tree placid mirror
Arcs hiding work
Restorative energy
Depression's last curse
Depression's last curse
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18 comments:
"Gloom bridging mirth"
I relate to that line, and so fine a one that's drawn between two such vastly opposite emotional states. Almost like one having to actively choose to get up and walk from one tired, oppressed country to the next, a land flowing with milk and honey.
Sorry, I'm rambling. That's just where your fine poem happened to twist the flow of my thoughts... :P
wicked flow dustus...some nice rhyme scheme...i hear what you are saying tony...there is some heavy emotion in this one...
Excellent Adam, I can relate considering the surrounding elements involved in my life right now. Trying to keep it together, hang on to the good, keep a belief of. I'm sure it shows in some of my writing to some level. Contrasting. Very well done!
I enjoyed this. Very stirring. Thanks.
All the best, Boonsong
Oh very deep and richly dark I got the sense of almost being smothered by thickness
"Restorative energy
Depression's last curse"
Now those are the two lines that hit the hardest.
Hi Adam...where do i start? I read Talons the other day and now yours and both have captured the very essence of the heavy foreboding when in that darkest place....depression though is part of me, i have lived with it all my life and i embrace it because with out it my highs would not be so wonderful and joyous..when i am high i am invincible and i need the depression (even when it is at its worse) to recharge me!!!! Thanks for sharing it was a beautifully crafted piece with delicate rhyme..excellent..cheers bud
BRILLIANT!!!
The play of words was just terrific!! Wonderfully done rhymes too..
I must say I really enjoyed reading this one (although it's about depression).. I suppose it's the way you bring it across is what makes it a joy for the reader (irrespective of the topic) And with this, you've done it again, Adam!!! Bravo..
To you and to One Shot!!!
@ Tony Single: Thank you. That's a pretty accurate interpretation of what I had been going through at the start of summer. I do feel the to the side of mirth—almost there :)
@Mr. Miller: thanks for reaching out to everyone. Both your writing and commentary is prolific.
@ April (betweenhearts75) TY for the encouragement, both in your writing and care. It's wonderful exchanging feedback with you.
@ Boonsong: Thanks. Glad you liked it. Warm regards.
@ Gwei Mui "Restorative energy
Depression's last curse" Those lines hit home for me in terms of setting, and remind of all the construction occurring over the bridge in the City of Lansing at the time of the photo.
@ Sir Marshall... Thanks for sharing that, Pete. I've been fighting depression for probably longer than I care to admit, though it used to be far worse until I found an outlet in writing (photography too). It's all about finding an emotional balance in life. I'm getting there. Working with the One Shot Poetry crew def helps. You, Bri, & Leslie rock and made me feel like part of the team from the get-go :)
@ kavisionz: Appreciate your comment, especially the word-play part. I'm fascinated by the flexibility of language in terms of multiple meanings and musicality. Those aspects of writing keep me striving. Thank you!
strong emotions - well captured - verse not a weapon - maybe sometimes...penetrative..
Hi Claudia :) "Verse not a weapon" can also be read as a choice, as in choosing writing over taking arms (against one's self). Your interpretation is equally valid and words can certainly be used as damaging weapons against others. Thank you so much for reading my poem and commenting.
Cheers :)
Perhaps you wouldn't write so beautifully were it not for depression and the extremity of feelings that go with it...there are rainbows in many grey skies. There's a balance for us. I sometimes wonder if depression and poetry go hand-in-hand, thus the need to express the feelings, getting them on the page and out of the heart...Anyway...beautiful post and such a serene, peaceful photo...love it. Heartspell
crazy my comment didn't come thru sorry AD.
Sooo gloomy- a heavy gloom pervades the theme and picture
beautiful my friend
Happy Friday
tomorrow is Pete
Your words put me in a world that got me to see many things. :) Thanks. Have fun today.
Very descriptive, Adam. Nice writing.
@ heartspell: makes sense what you say about poets expressing feeling— understanding feelings seems a step toward achieving needed balance. HS, your comments are always considerate and thought-provoking. Many thanks.
@ moondustwriter: You should write a gloomy one and call it "moon gloom". he he. thanks, Moonie :)
@ Doraz: thank you, my friend :)
@ PattiKen: thanks for the feedback, Patti. cheers
Fall into winter - there's almost a play on words here. Falling into the cold of depression/falling from one season to the next...
Really enjoyed this poem, dustus.
lovely read Adam..you picked your words carefully,very nice work here cheers!
@ Talon: thank you. Your feedback is always welcome and respected, as are your poetic works :)
@Abeer(Desert Rose)I used to write much more stream-of-conscious types of pieces before beginning to blog. Think I might re-experiment with that again :)
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