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Monday, 26 July 2010

first kiss: a poem by Brian Miller


at the pool,
on hot summer days,
we tucked our bodies tight
beneath the crystal surface
to see who could
hold their breathe the longest
and i know johnny
must have cheated,
he stayed down
so long...

the first kiss
we shared
would have
broke the record,
passing a single breath
back and forth
between us,
happily drowning.
at

26 comments:

  1. Anonymous26 July 2010 at 05:11

    Oh wow! That is romantic in the extreme! Bravo, Brian. Bravo!

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  2. TALON26 July 2010 at 05:12

    "happily drowning" - I just loved those words because the image was so perfect with it and those two words aren't usually uttered in the same breath. Underwater kisses are neat and would be even more so as a first one :)

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  3. moondustwriter26 July 2010 at 05:40

    yeah that first kiss worth drowning over

    great for One Stop - Nice Bri

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  4. g-man26 July 2010 at 05:47

    Brian...?
    I think I love you....G

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  5. moondustwriter26 July 2010 at 06:24

    Just want to thank all the people who come to One Stop each week. We appreciate you!!!!

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  6. JRM26 July 2010 at 08:38

    I love the image that this has given me.

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  7. Me26 July 2010 at 10:27

    So romantic!

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  8. Brian Miller26 July 2010 at 11:25

    me, i am a big romantic fool...this is a simple...write it while we were at the pool on saturday watching all the kids play...ok, so i was playing as well...smiles.

    g-man...i love you too...lol.

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  9. Kay26 July 2010 at 14:04

    Makes one crave for a sultry one... sigh

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  10. Anonymous26 July 2010 at 14:57

    Brian, This is beautiful and supported by a terrific photo. Thank for bringing it to us.

    All the best, Boonsong

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  11. Caty26 July 2010 at 15:10

    very nice, Brian...the words and the photo :)

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  12. Claudia26 July 2010 at 15:51

    Oh I love it!!!
    Nice idea to compare a first kiss with boys games - and underwater image and drowning - and having no breath left and giving it that endless feeling - honestly - love it - and for sure - it's heartbreaking romantic

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  13. dustus26 July 2010 at 17:25

    Great confluence of feelings and ideas depicting the transition from childhood game to coming of age. Excellent, Bri!

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  14. Desert Rose26 July 2010 at 17:38

    loved the idea of this piece Brian,intriguing and i relate to the emotion..well done my friend!
    last line is a hit! ;)

    great share with One stop..:)

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  15. Monkey Man26 July 2010 at 18:04

    Brian...you and Johnny??? Care to share something? Seriously, great first kiss post. They do inspire, don't they?

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  16. Brian Miller26 July 2010 at 18:21

    haha. no monkey...i did not kiss johnny...oh, i need to be a bit more clear in my writing...smiles.

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  17. Anonymous26 July 2010 at 18:25

    I love the idea of
    one Stop Poetry. Will watch for a while and then join in, if I may? Any rules for One Stop Wed eg length, subject, etc.?

    Brian, love your work and first kiss made me feel so nostalgic!

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  18. Jessie26 July 2010 at 18:58

    aaahhhh...

    a kiss like that would be worth drowning for!

    hey...i'm actually going to have a submission this week!! :-) lol

    thanks for stopping by and saying "Hi".

    smiles,

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  19. Joanna Jenkins27 July 2010 at 00:14

    Again I ask, are you absolutely POSITIVE you do not have a twin brother to marry my little sister?!?!?

    You are such a romantic guy! This is perfect.

    Cheers, jj

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  20. Suz27 July 2010 at 14:17

    this was so romantic
    and full of imagery
    great wed poem

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  21. swputh27 July 2010 at 16:13

    First kiss rocks...
    Romantic

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  22. Pastor Bill27 July 2010 at 21:01

    I enjoyed this. Kind of resonates with some memories. - Bill

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  23. Jenn27 July 2010 at 23:59

    "passing a single breath
    back and forth "
    nice! :)

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  24. Shay Love28 July 2010 at 01:37

    I must say this is a very lovely, beautiful poem. Great ending.

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  25. Anonymous28 July 2010 at 03:28

    One word...B R I L L I A N T!! So much passion in this. Fantastic image to compliment the poem so very well. Thanks for sharing :)

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  26. Marshy1 August 2010 at 20:16

    what a wonderful poem Bri...now that really has got my mind thinking....if i could tell you the story of my early life you would be enjoying my thoughts too LOL

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