tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post138429740509635294..comments2023-09-02T15:52:37.700+01:00Comments on One Stop Poetry - Where Poets, Writers and Artists Meet: Broken: A Poem By Pete MarshallOne Stop - The Place For Poets, Writers and Artistshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07020684469937853500noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-70650095202656362622010-09-07T07:07:14.334+01:002010-09-07T07:07:14.334+01:00Your hardwork paid off in my opinion, Pete. This ...Your hardwork paid off in my opinion, Pete. This was a chilling tale of horror in and out of the body and mind. The poem's topic became clear for me at the line "sheets that are soiled." That is just never a good thing. Lovely write.Sheilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06541409754494611831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-25877704055079438182010-09-05T21:52:03.330+01:002010-09-05T21:52:03.330+01:00hi ya moonie..yes you were right to pick up on tha...hi ya moonie..yes you were right to pick up on that as i wanted to make it feel like there had been a fight and even a death but the reality of the death was the breakdown of the soul and spirit..cheers peteMarshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-5381766149513868162010-09-05T21:46:44.095+01:002010-09-05T21:46:44.095+01:00sorry - I'm late. I read this yesterday and ha...sorry - I'm late. I read this yesterday and had to wait to respond.<br /><br />It speaks of mental illness but I also picked up on domestic abuse both are quite heart breaking<br /><br />Moon hugs Petemoondustwriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09848554806751678968noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-57051882566183427202010-09-05T19:53:28.455+01:002010-09-05T19:53:28.455+01:00hi neva..thanks for popping by..cheers petehi neva..thanks for popping by..cheers peteMarshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-30069041928189443242010-09-04T20:07:46.163+01:002010-09-04T20:07:46.163+01:00Pete, I am touched deeply by your poem......Pete, I am touched deeply by your poem......Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04526666908406849762noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-44052511874902263562010-09-04T19:31:33.278+01:002010-09-04T19:31:33.278+01:00thanks adam...as always i doff my cap to praise fr...thanks adam...as always i doff my cap to praise from you..cheers peteMarshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-63004911416607239502010-09-04T19:30:48.401+01:002010-09-04T19:30:48.401+01:00hi annell...thats the beauty of poetry and each in...hi annell...thats the beauty of poetry and each individuals own interpretation...and yours sits just as well with it..its good because it also open my eyes to a piece and i can read it differently too..cheers peteMarshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-28864674205838975952010-09-04T19:28:56.640+01:002010-09-04T19:28:56.640+01:00wow thanks claudia..thats a great comment..as i wa...wow thanks claudia..thats a great comment..as i was writing this i had so many different ideas buzzing in my head about comparing your body to a house...but it took me a long time to write and rewrite this and i must admit there is one line that i am still not happy with but when you get a comment like yours it does make you feel kinda smug..cheers peteMarshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-72677054312559460072010-09-04T14:15:19.076+01:002010-09-04T14:15:19.076+01:00Vivid write and excellent use of metaphor, Pete. W...Vivid write and excellent use of metaphor, Pete. Wonderful combination of rhythm and detail. Also dig the porous details in the picture. cheersdustushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07796500077556153584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-7924896902211833272010-09-04T14:14:56.513+01:002010-09-04T14:14:56.513+01:00Though it was not what you were writing about, wha...Though it was not what you were writing about, what came to mind for me, and for the first time. That the house might miss the occupants it held, when they are gone. So it is not only us who might miss a house who has given us shelter, but we might be missed as well.annell4https://www.blogger.com/profile/07629830133868270690noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-71015234226486129222010-09-04T14:11:54.342+01:002010-09-04T14:11:54.342+01:00pete - this is fantastic
while reading it, i had t...pete - this is fantastic<br />while reading it, i had to think of the former house of my grandparents (i was often there as a child) and when they died and i entered that house some years later (it was an old farmhouse and they left it just as it were with all the furniture), it felt just like reading your poem with all the wonderful words you found to describe it.<br />and after reading your explanation - i think people can feel exactly in the same way<br />WOW!! hat off!Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-40218754159185577612010-09-04T13:33:16.870+01:002010-09-04T13:33:16.870+01:00hi gerry..thank you for your wonderful comments an...hi gerry..thank you for your wonderful comments and support..cheers pete<br /><br />thanks bri..appreciate that..cheers peteMarshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-30623855252990459962010-09-04T13:30:16.123+01:002010-09-04T13:30:16.123+01:00HI boonie....thanks very much for your comments.ch...HI boonie....thanks very much for your comments.cheers pete<br /><br />kkoning..a job well done..cheers pete<br /><br />thanks riikalnfinity..actually took me all day to get this right..must have rewritten it about 30 timesMarshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-85899065364324790032010-09-04T12:05:01.783+01:002010-09-04T12:05:01.783+01:00a rather chilling write pete...you set the tone we...a rather chilling write pete...you set the tone well...leaving us with images to ponder...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-20088552942737876512010-09-04T12:02:50.997+01:002010-09-04T12:02:50.997+01:00Wonderful rhythm and the words roll around my mout...Wonderful rhythm and the words roll around my mouth. this is so emotive as well. We have taken on three houses with just such memories in our life together and with love hoped to transform them.It takes a long time for sadness, hoplessness and fear to disappear from premises. You captured that exactly.Gerry Snapehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07269492251928362799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-45473896619209290032010-09-04T11:17:19.620+01:002010-09-04T11:17:19.620+01:00wonderfully written!=Dwonderfully written!=DRiikaInfinityyhttp://riikainfinityy.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-88866016019160297222010-09-04T11:12:40.339+01:002010-09-04T11:12:40.339+01:00This gave me chills! Thank you for sharing.This gave me chills! Thank you for sharing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4998981984340553400.post-67874380194872699672010-09-04T08:38:36.188+01:002010-09-04T08:38:36.188+01:00Your poems have a distinct and beautiful rhythm. ...Your poems have a distinct and beautiful rhythm. I really enjoy them. Thanks.<br /><br />All the best, BoonieAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com